战胜六级：

Nov.27st,2004

Dear Mr Annan,

I'm a university student in China. I am glad to write to you to show my opinion on the world peace.

Peace and Development are the two themes of the world nowadays.Hundreds of countries and millions of people are working hard on it. And now most of countries in the world are trying their best to keep the peace of the world ,including developed and developing countries. I think there are billions of people dreaming of living in a peaceful world. But as I know,violence is still exist.For example ,many terrorists are trying to destroy the world peace.Powerful countries as USA are inclined to be aggressive. And serious conflicts happen in African frequently. But I believe these incidents are minority,the majority of people are eager for peace.

So I hope the UN can take some measures to protect the world peace. I hope more laws and contracts about peace to be drawn up,less terror incidents to happen. I hope there are less wars in the world and people in every country enjoy their lives in peace.

Best wishes!

Yours,

wcq

错误：

1.now most of countries in the world / now most of the countries in the world

2.But as I know,violence is still exist. / violence still exists

3.Powerful countries as USA / Powerful countries like USA

4.I believe these incidents are minority / I believe these incidents are not representative.

小羽：

Dear Mr. Annan,

I am now writing to you to express my person opinion about the Internal Day of Peace which galls on September 21st, 2004.

As you said at the Millennium Summit, the United Nations should function as the leader in the intervention against war, diseases and poverty, I believe what you said is right. Currently the worsening situation in the Middle East is worrying not only me, but all the people in the world. The American government has sent its troops to occupy Iraq and even worse, some American soldier maltreated the Iraq prisoners in jail, which is seriously violating the international law. The Bush administration always advocates human rights movement, but the Iraqi situation is a very good example to let the world know clearly what the American government is aiming at. September 21st, 2004 is the International Day of Peace. I firmly believe that any body in the world, black, white or yellow, must surely I love peace and fight against wars.

I sincerely hope that the United Nations, under your guidance, will lead the world on its way to peace so that the people all over the world shall live in peace and harmony.

Yours cordially,

错误： 写的非常好！

1.some American soldier maltreated the Iraq prisoners in jail / some American soldiers maltreated the Iraqi prisoners

苜儿：

Dear Mr. Kofi Annan,

Thank you for reading this letter in the midst of pressing affairs! I’m a college student from China. I have paying close attention to the world peace, especially recently.

History lets us know, the war made great influence to a country, even the world . It not only influence people's stable life but politics and economy of a country, makes the society in turmoil. We object to the war and recommend the peace. We unwilling to see that solve the dispute with the military force, and hope that the world is full of love. The world peace is an eternal topic. Everybody is looking forward to a really peaceful day.

Please pay more attentions and measures to solve the problem that still exist at present. I believe , the world will be more beautiful tomorrow !

Yours,

Muer

错误：

1.I have paying close attention to the world peace, especially recently. / I have been paying…..

2. History lets us know, the war made great influence to a country, even the world / Historically, the war has great influence on a country,…..

3.It not only influence / influences

4.We unwilling to see that solve the dispute with the military force, / We are unwilling to see that the dispute is solved with……

5.Please pay more attentions and measures to solve the problem / Please pay more attention and take more measures to solve the problem

6.the world will be more beautiful tomorrow ! / the world will have a more beautiful tomorrow !

7.

janezhang：

我的作文(四级)

Dear Mr kofi Anna: nov.28.2004

I am glad to write a letter to you and thanks for you can look it from your busy work.

First,i introduce myself, i am a college student of China.I love peaceful life,so it is bring

more and more happy to me ,i can got life of silence.

Second, i have two viewpoint for the peaceful of world,one side is that the world must

be build ideas of peaceful.other side is that the world must be reduce the violent incident

and terror matter.

eventually,i hope that United Nations take the most function , make it no

war,no terror,only peaceful and beatiful world .i wish every country should

try hard together .

yours sincerely

Janezhang

我写的不好.

错误：错误很多，不及格作文。

1.thanks for you can look it from your busy work. / and many thanks for your reading my letter during your busy work

2.First,i introduce myself, / First, let me introduce myself

3.so it is bring more and more happy to me / so it will bring more and more happy to me

4.i have two viewpoint for the peaceful of world, / I have two viewpoints about the world peace.

5.one side is that the world must be build ideas of peaceful. / … must be built on

6.other side is that the world must be reduce the violent incident and terror matter. / the other is that the world should be free from violent incidents and terrorist matters.

Beone：

我的作文十分的poor............哎，不怕丑的贴出来

Dear Kofi Annan:

I glad to write to you,these is some viewpoint of me about the peace.

Today,the world is more peaceful beforce past.But,it aslo remain so problem which among the countries case the nation's affair conflict.The result for it that it will be cause the war!

There is a great wish of me that i hope the world go on develop and peace forever.Peaceful is most important for our's life.I wonder between the countries which can better solve the contracdition.

At least,i hope the U.N can do more contribution for peace.

Yours sincerely

BB

错误：

1.these is some viewpoint of me about the peace. / there are… / I have some viewpoints

2.the world is more peaceful beforce past / the world is more peaceful than before.

3.it aslo remain so problem which among the countries case the nation's affair conflict 不通

4.The result for it that it will be cause the war! 不通

5.There is a great wish of me that i hope the world go on develop and peace foreve / I was hoping that the world would develop ……

6.I wonder between the countries which can better solve the contracdition. 不通

7.can do more contribution for / can make more contributions to….

doot88：

我的作文

Dear mr kofi annan:

I am a sophomore in the Biology Department of china. I am writing to you about some opinon in the world peace.

Recent years,some countrys are involed in war. More and more people have no food and houses. When we see a 13-year- old girl who lost her leg,because of the afraid war.We are appealing " we must stop war".

Unition country agency is a very important in the world peace. It can promots the world peace process . I sincerely hope that the union country agency will try the best on the world peace.All of us will appreaciate it.Thank you.

yours sincerely

anna

错误：您的作文90%以上句子都有错误，考试时为不及格档次的作文。请加油！

1. I am a sophomore in the Biology Department of china / I am a Chinese college student majoring in Biology.

2. I am writing to you about some opinon in the world peace. / I am writing to you to express some opinions about the world peace.

3.Recent years,some countrys are involed in war / In recent years, some countries are involved in wars.

4.When we see a 13-year- old girl who lost her leg,because of the afraid war.We are appealing " we must stop war" / When we see a 13-year- old girl who lost her leg because of the horrifying war, we are appealing " we must stop war"

5.Unition country agency is a very important in the world peace / The UN is a very important organization in promoting world peace.

6.promots / promote

7.All of us will appreaciate it / … appreciate

AirYang：

Respectable, Mr. general secretary

It is a pleasure to write to you to express my opinion of world peace. I am a student from China. My schoolmates and I love peace and wish the status could be kept for long. Due to the grinding of continuous war in the past, we Chinese people cherish peace, and realize how precious such situation is. We appreciate the effort of world peace that the United Nations has contributed since it established.

Yet there still are some things threatening the valuable peace. Recently, several nations are taking their nuclear programs. Although they claimed the use was just for peace, it was a very dangerous trend. Another threat is the terrorism. Such organizations greatly shocked the world in the latest decade. Terrorist groups and militants have made many attacks to civilian targets. They attempt to reach their evil, political purpose in this way. It is the greatest pain for the world.

Fortunately, most countries have smelled the problems, and the UN has operated effective measures against these barriers in the way to world peace. But to reach real peace, we still have a long road to go. No matter Chinese or the people living in other countries would not like to experience the bitter of war that we had suffered before. So we have reasons(这里的reason可以用 some代替吗？) to join our hands in protecting our home from any hurt imaginable. We expect the UN could have effect more greatly in the future. We expect to see a comfortable and steady climate.

Yours Sincerely,

AirYang

错误：

1.We appreciate the effort of world peace that the United Nations has contributed / We appreciate the contribution to the world peace that the UN has made..

2.Although they claimed the use was just for peace, / … its use

rilxk：

I am a college student of People’s Republic of China. I’m very apologetic to occupy your limited leisure time for reading my letter, but I remain to hope you know about the idea of the peace of world in the eye of the average man.

Nowadays, it is beyond doubt that peace and development are the major subject. However, there are some developed nations break the rule and launch a war against the third-world countries regardless of the Unite Nation’s persuasion. Every one hold the idea that one country has no rights to interfere in other nation’s domestic affairs and has no qualification to take up others’ resources.

In my belief, UN should play a leading role in worldwide businesses and enforce the sever punishment of the aggressive nations . I sincerely hope that UN, under your presidency, can ease the conflicts in every corner of the world and act as the world cop to bring the authentic peace.

Respectfully yours

Rilxk

错误：

1.I remain to hope / I still hope…

2.in the eye of the average man. / … an average man

3.there are some developed nations break the rule a /… which break….

4.interfere in other nation’s domestic affairs / intervene in ….

给你的朋友写信，阐述你对他的忧虑的看法与建议。你的朋友这个学期到校外做兼职，影响了学习，并有几门考试不及格，他问你应该怎么办。

范文：

Dear Xiaotong,

Glad to receive your mail but sorry to hear that you failed in exams of some compulsory courses. You mentioned in your letter that “I have been losing sleep over this and this is a major setback in my college days”.

In my view, it serves you right. After all, as a student, studying should be on top of your agenda. Although you have made a fortune and lighten your parents’ load through doing part-jobs, you missed the golden opportunity of learning. I would like to make some suggestions for you. You should strike / achieve / keep a balance between studying and extracurricular activities. So now you should drop some of the jobs you are taking and give top priority to your main task. Keep in mind that over time your priority will change. After stepping out of the Ivory Tower, you could moonlightat will.

Defer:

Dear xiao ming:

It is not inevitable to meet this state. I believe that you can cope with them successfully. You take a part-time job this term, although, and you spend an army of leisure time on it . It is not incorrect . With this work , you can get advancement on ability . It is the wealth for you .From your words, I hold the fact that , you failed to the qualify in some subjects . Therefore, you have the feeling that you are in hot water . In some part , it is unessential and wisdom for you to change the situation .You have a talent for learning , I harbor the view that . Due to the limited spare time , you may pay a close attention in class . If you master the knowledge fast during the class ,you don’t need much more hours to review the texts . You will be over that you can not get through the tests . There have positive effects ,because of this consequence it makes an timely alarm to you , and you will never face the same phenomenon . In a word , you can solute the matter in the best way .

错误：

1.It is not inevitable to meet this state. / It is not inevitable to meet this kind of state.

2.you failed to the qualify in some subjects / you failed in some subjects

3.You have a talent for learning , I harbor the view that / You have a talent for learning , I harbor the view .

4.If you master the knowledge fast during the class / If you master the knowledge fast in class.

5. you can solute the matter in the best way ./ you can solve the matter in the best way .

echo811018:

Dear Xiaolan,

How have you been in the past couple of days? I have received your mail for two days. I’m so sorry to hear that you are failed the exams, especially, most of them are compulsory courses.

As a college student, acquiring knowledge is still on the top of our agenda. Obviously, you have committed a blunder. Naturally, doing part-time jobs may be good for you to hunt a nice job, but it has brought you a negative effect. It’s a hot potato, although, I am trying to make some approaches for you.

For a start, please don’t worry too much. It is no use crying over spilt milk. Secondly, it is advisable that you stop doing the part-time jobs and study hard again. The point is, it is urgent for us to review and pass the second test of those lessons. Last but not least, we will at the dawn of this new school term, you can catch up with the other fellow students if you hold the chance.

Well, I have to attend my class. Next time, I’ll visit you and we can have a nice chat. Take care and see you soon.

Best wishes

Yours sincerely

Zhang Ying

错误：写的很棒！

1.It’s a hot potato, although, I am trying to make some approaches for you. / Although it’s a hot potato, I am trying to make some approaches for you.

2.you are failed the exams / you failed in some exams

3.we will at the dawn of this new school term, / we will be at the dawn of this new school term,

豌豆:

Dear Xiao Wang:

I am glad to hear from you. I feel upset for your experience these days. I pray everything is going well from now.

You tell of your anxiety over the study on your letter, since it is severe influenced by the long-time part time job, and ask for some suggestions. I really know that it is because your family finance, you have to take so many part time jobs over the past three years. Concerning to the situation, however, I do believe it is advisable to transfer your attention from the jobs to your lectures. We are senior students; it is the last year for us to strive for our future. Only we have the excellent achievement, will we have the capital to step into the society, and we will not have the pity when leaving the Ivory Tower.

I suppose you can agree with me. If so, the following two ways, in my mind, are helpful to you. First, a face-to-face communication with your teacher is quite needed, for he or she have the experience to tackle the type of questions. Additionally, it pays to be diligent, it is totally possible for you to have advancement if you take pains to study hard from now. I am waiting for your good news.

Good Luck

Yours Ge

错误：

1.You tell of your anxiety over the study on your letter / You tell of your anxiety over the study in your letter

2.Concerning to the situation, however, / Concerning the situation, however,

3.for he or she have /… has

4.to study hard from now. / to study hard from now on