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English as a global language

The discussion about whether English becoming a global language has brought us more benefits than risks is a very controversial one. People can hardly reach a consensus on this issue. Before presenting my view, I would like to explore both sides of the argument.

It is very clear that English as a global language has brought us enormous benefits in all aspects of society, which has greatly promoted our economic development. To begin with, as a tool of cross-cultural communication, English promotes mutual understanding and friendship, removing prejudice and h123lity. It is no exaggeration to say that English helps maintain the world peace. Moreover, English offers us a good opportunity to learn from developed countries. For instance, China, a developing country, is in great need of advanced knowledge and technology. English as a global language removes the language barriers for us, so that we can introduce foreign experts to our country more conveniently

However, it can not be denied that English also exerts a negative influence on our human civilization. Since English becomes a dominant language, a large number of indigenous languages are on the verge of extinction, which poses potential risks to the cultural diversity. Just imagine, if everyone in the world looks the same, speaks the same, and thinks the same, our world will become a homogenous one. How terrible it is! It is widely accepted that language is the vehicle of culture, so killing language equals killing culture. In doing so, we erase whole histories and bury entire stories, the richness of which the world loses forever.

Obviously, English like anything else, has more than one face. Its advantages should never keep us from their drawbacks. From my perspective, English and other languages can go side by side with each other, each shinning more brilliantly in the other’s company.

吴建业老师的点评:

1.结构合理。 本文作者采用了雅思写作经典的等分结构:PARAGRAPH 1 INTRODUCTION; PARAGRAPH 2 FOR;PARAGRAPH 3 AGAINST;PARAGRAPH 4 CONCLUSION(MY OPINION)。许多环球雅思高分学员均采用了PASSPORT TO IELTS推荐的标准模式。

2.路标明显。作者能准确运用老师课堂讲授的经典表达方式,令文章条理清晰,层次感强。

3.语法扎实。能较好运用各种句式,没有出现低级语法小错,体现较强的语言能力。

4.用词精确。作者准确运用写作十大原则核心词汇,善于换用不同表达方式,用词贴切,准确。

5.善于积累万用观点。从文章的用词和论点论据可以看出作者善于积累万用观点。其中不少观点和词汇均来自《最新雅思考试胜策——写作》文化类话题,作者并非机械照搬,而是巧妙地把不同话题的观点和词汇结合在一起,为本话题服务,从而做到以不变应万变。

匡伟同学为非英语专业考生,能取得写作7分的好成绩,可喜可贺!希望大家能从高分考生的优秀范文吸收养分,总结经验,不断提升自身写作水平。


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